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Star newspaper announces memorial service for ‘slain’ hospital

The Nairobi Hospital has organised a memorial service for the slain institution’s finance director Eric Maigo (Star, September 22-24, p.16). Here, it is the institution that is “slain”. And because the event is a memorial service, it is clear both the “slain” Nairobi Hospital and Eric Maigo are dead. If it is Eric who is slain, you write that the memorial service is for the institution’s slain finance director. See where to place “slain” to avoid the confusion?

Kenya could be staring at mega investment deals following the visit by President William Ruto to the US (Star, September 22-24, p.5). Alafu: Kenya is staring at increased dollar shortage…(p.13). This nation seems to be “staring at” things all the time – if you watch it from Lion Place.

A Kilifi court has given the police up to Monday to hold 11 suspects in relation to the deaths of two children who allegedly died as a result of religious indoctrination (Star, September 22-24, p.2). Writing “the deaths of two children who allegedly died” is repetitive. Write, the deaths of two children allegedly as a result of religious indoctrination.

President William Ruto appoints Ekwee Ethuro to be the chairperson of the Higher Education Loans Board for a period of five years (Citizen TV Kenya on X, September 22). For five years, everyone knows it is “a period of”.

Farmers in the North Rift have say that the high fuel prices could negate gains achieved through fertiliser subsidy touted as a game changer by the Kenya Kwanza administration (Standard, September 21, p.10). Farmers “have say”?

Kolum, a maize and wheat farmer, asked the government to come out with a solution (Standard, September 21, p.10). Come out of where? Phrasal verb “come out with” means say something in sudden and rude manner. Why not simply say the farmer asked the government to provide/offer a solution?

Humphrey Lilande, operations manager at Nundoroto Farm Company, said the only option for farmers is to value add (Standard, September 21, p.10). What’s “to value add”? What grammar is that? To add value?

At the time (2020), government data had shown about 800,000 Kenyans have one form of hearing impairment or another (Standard, September 21, p.12). Three paras down: Umi (nominated MP), 27, said including sign language in the curriculum would benefit about 2.7 million deaf Kenyans. So, how many Kenyans have hearing impairment? Could the number have shot up from 80,000 in 2020 to 2.7 million currently?

St Luke’s Hospital, Canadian charity organisation to offer prosthetic limbs (Standard headline, September 21, p.13). Intro: St Luke’s Orthopaedic and Trauma Hospital in Eldoret has partnered with a Canadian charity to provide prosthetic limbs. Para 2 has “prosthetics for amputees” and “prosthetic arm”. Para 3 has “prosthetic device”. Para 4, “prosthetic arms”. Para 5, “prosthetic affordability”. Para 6, “prosthetic hands”. Cut the jargon. Say artificial limbs or arms for ease of communication.

Alafu: The Nairobi Coffee Exchange (NCE) plans to put up a coffee cupping laboratory to streamline the pricing of the commodity (Standard, September 21, p.18). Next: Cupping is the measurement of physical and organoleptic characteristics of coffee, which allows the evaluation of the attributes, qualities and defects of the grain. Organo-what? You got that?

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