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Do you know why folks giggle at those rosy business success stories?

Martha Karua on being a presidential running mate: ‘I do not know about tomorrow’ (Citizen Digital, December 16). Ahem, what is the news in this headline? Why should anyone waste time reading the story? Who – except Prophet Owuor alone – knows about tomorrow?

“Gyms are a lucrative venture with little competition” (Nation, Powering SMEs, December 7, p.7). Those are supposedly the words of fitness investor Michael Mwiti of Chogoria. A thousand words later, the same man is quoted as saying: “The fitness industry is highly competitive, and staying ahead of the competition is the only option”. Ukweli uko wapi?

Nyeri governor hints at joining Ruto’s UDA camp (Standard, December 6, p.6). Intro: Nyeri Governor Mutahi Kahiga has said he is now ready to leave Jubilee Party and join UDA. Is that a “hint” as stated in the headline?

Manufacturers from the Coast region have called on the state to facilitate the sector to expand production for the local, domestic, regional and international markets (Standard, December 5, p.21). What’s the difference between “local” and “domestic” market? None.

DP Ruto’s Saturday pronouncement fronting Mr Gachagua as a possible pick for his deputy came as a surprise to many, but few would doubt the embattled MP’s tireless efforts in popularising the DP’s presidential campaigns in the Mt Kenya region (Nation, December 6, p.4). Doesn’t make sense. If “few” would doubt Gachagua’s work popularising Ruto, why would “many” be surprised that the DP sees him as a possible running mate?

He was President Kenyatta’s personal assistant in 2000s and a key campaigner in his 2002 failed presidential bid. Mr Kenyatta lost that election, but Mr Gachagua’s decision to stick by his boss came to pay off when he decided to enter active politics in 2017 (Nation, December 6, p.4). The first sentence ends with Kenyatta’s “2002 failed presidential bid”. Why start the next sentence with, “Mr Kenyatta lost that election”, repeating a point already made?

Members of Parliament have failed in their bid to stop recovery of at least Sh2.7 billion they earned in illegal allowances (Nation, December 6, p.5). The three words “in their bid” are useless. Reread the sentence without them and it makes perfect sense. Trim off the fat.

Nine months into the 2022 General Election, the battle for Nakuru governor’s seat has intensified…(Nation, December 6, p.17). Is it nine months “into” the 2022 election?

Public universities are struggling to stay afloat due to shrinking funding from the government, a situation that has caused lecturers to down their tools as the institutions are unable to run their operations smoothly and pay salaries. Among the factors that have contributed to the financial crisis are diminishing capitation from the government…. (Nation, December 6, p.40). The first sentence attributes the crisis to “shrinking funding from the government”. Next, the same point is repeated as “diminishing capitation from the government”. Kwa nini?

A monthly package costs Sh3000 while daily pay costs one Sh200 a day (Nation, Powering SMEs, P.7). “Daily” and “a day” mean the same.

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