ODM leader Raila Odinga this week told the Interim Electoral and Boundaries Commission (IEBC) to prepare for a referendum (Sunday Nation, August 16, p.2). Interim?
When Opwondo’s body was brought home for burial on Thursday evening, an angry mourners descended on the 6-year-old Peter Ndege and his tow sons Calistus Waremba, 51, and Frederick Opwondo, 22 (Sunday Nation, August 16, p.2). “An angry mourners”?
The county has registered more than 854 Covid-19 cases, 14 from samples tested on Monday alone (Star, August 19, p.8). How many are “more than 854 Covid-19 cases”? What is the point of “more than” in a sentence that has an exact figure?
The Kenya Private Sector Alliance (Kepsa) has called for immediate audit of the reaffirmed its commitment to the promotion of ethical business practices in order to help combat corruption and bribery (Star, August 19, p.14). What is the meaning of this intro? How does such gibberish make it to print?
Resumption of trade in used clothes known as mitumba which is set to resume under strict protocols after the reopening of hotels, lodges and parks is the latest indicator that Kenya is getting back to business (People Daily editorial, August 18, p.10). “Resumption of trade…which is set to resume…” Poor writing. Rewrite.
Intro: One year since seven people died in a flash flood in Hells Gate National Park in ‘killer gorge’ (Star, August 20, p.11). What? Refresher course in news writing recommended.
Speaking about the movie, the producer said, “Four children from Kenya, Egypt, South Africa and Senegal travel back in time to ancient Timbuktu, which is one Africa’s most famous ancient cities” (Star, August 20, p.19). But the quoted producer is not named anywhere in the story. Why?
EACC detectives confiscate CPU’s from Kirinyaga Govenor Anne Waiguru’s office (KBC Channel1 News tweet, August 20). Matatu’s will soon no longer accept cash fares after a data company started training public service operators to go cashless (Star, August 20, p.24). The misuse of the apostrophe in “CPU’s” and “matatu’s” irritates.
